Where the trees whisper her name…

100 Word Wednesday – week 1 – Dark Track

Frost bitten grass crunched beneath his feet as he made his way slowly through the trees. Night had come quickly and the moon was high, casting shadows of demons on the path in front of him.

Suddenly, jerking back trapped, he thrashed about, his hair becoming more entangled in the forest’s ungloved hands. Beating fast, his heart reminded him that he was still alive, but what of Lucy?

She was here, of that he was sure, he had returned every year to search. She was trapped somewhere within this forest, lost and afraid in this place where the tress whispered her name…. (102 words)

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8 thoughts on “Where the trees whisper her name…

  1. Harry

    Atmospheric, but I’m not totally sure what’s going on here. There’s a lot of movement, perhaps too much. Slowly, quickly, then suddenly? That’s a lot of LY going on there.

    The description of the action is crucial in my understanding of the placement of the character in this super short story. When he’s “jerked back” I’m not totally sure what’s going on. Is he being attacked? It dragged me right out of the story.

    Thankfully, the premise was intriguing enough for me to see past these things, but only just. I like the idea of Lucy as a ghost, even if this is a misdirected and incorrect reading, aha.

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